2025 Competition Lyrics Entry:
Water by Dorothy Burkhalter
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Lyrics
WATER
Our Love was like water
It filled my soul
It nourished my body
And mind even more
It rose to the clouds
Then rained back again
Stood out in a crowd
Ageless hearts, forever friends
Our Love was like water
At times it would bathe us
In a warm endless flow
At times it seemed frozen
With no place to go
Why did we hurt us
Sometimes you
Sometimes me
Then your touch would just melt
Us into We
Our Love was like water
Not a drop in the ocean
But the ocean in a drop
A Life full of devotion
A Love with no stop
Our Love was like water
You can’t live without
We were going to go together
Now I am here, and you are not
Without those years of laughter
I’d surely turn to stone
Now years of Happy Ever-After
I find myself alone
My heart aches at the thought of you
It smiles having been loved by you
My heart breaks always missing you
Why can’t I still have you
Our love was like water
Not a drop in the ocean
But the ocean in a drop
A Love full of emotion
A Life – sudden stop
Our love was like water
With the power of a surfer’s wave
Now quietly, gently it washes
Over your grave
Water – I need more water
Our Love was like water
It filled my soul
It nourished my body
And mind even more
It rose to the clouds
Then rained back again
Stood out in a crowd
Ageless hearts, forever friends
Our Love was like water
At times it would bathe us
In a warm endless flow
At times it seemed frozen
With no place to go
Why did we hurt us
Sometimes you
Sometimes me
Then your touch would just melt
Us into We
Our Love was like water
Not a drop in the ocean
But the ocean in a drop
A Life full of devotion
A Love with no stop
Our Love was like water
You can’t live without
We were going to go together
Now I am here, and you are not
Without those years of laughter
I’d surely turn to stone
Now years of Happy Ever-After
I find myself alone
My heart aches at the thought of you
It smiles having been loved by you
My heart breaks always missing you
Why can’t I still have you
Our love was like water
Not a drop in the ocean
But the ocean in a drop
A Love full of emotion
A Life – sudden stop
Our love was like water
With the power of a surfer’s wave
Now quietly, gently it washes
Over your grave
Water – I need more water
Author
Bio
Dear Judges,
I’ve been keeping a journal for years and looking back now it seems every few months I’d be asking: what is my purpose? why am I here? If I attempted to answer myself, it would often include the Wish – I want to be a songwriter. A song that would take the listener to a place they needed to be to hear what they needed to hear to heal their soul and lift their spirit, to cry a little or sing along. Over the years I’d see glimpses of that dream, but this one was different. I proclaimed: I think I did it – wrote that “one hit wonder” that has been inside of me. The Universe gave me the words and they poured out of me in just a few short minutes. It was as if the page wanted to suck the ink right out of my pen, it just flowed. When I reached the end, I didn’t want to change a thing and I felt this is my shot, I have to do something with this. So dear Judges, I put this in your hands so you can guide me on my path to creating music! Lyrics without a melody is like Knowledge without action – it is merely potential! I look forward to your critique and sharing in the wisdom of your experience. Being a rookie at this stage in my life is exhilarating and with adding a twist on your motto: You are never too old to be what you were meant to be!
I’ve been keeping a journal for years and looking back now it seems every few months I’d be asking: what is my purpose? why am I here? If I attempted to answer myself, it would often include the Wish – I want to be a songwriter. A song that would take the listener to a place they needed to be to hear what they needed to hear to heal their soul and lift their spirit, to cry a little or sing along. Over the years I’d see glimpses of that dream, but this one was different. I proclaimed: I think I did it – wrote that “one hit wonder” that has been inside of me. The Universe gave me the words and they poured out of me in just a few short minutes. It was as if the page wanted to suck the ink right out of my pen, it just flowed. When I reached the end, I didn’t want to change a thing and I felt this is my shot, I have to do something with this. So dear Judges, I put this in your hands so you can guide me on my path to creating music! Lyrics without a melody is like Knowledge without action – it is merely potential! I look forward to your critique and sharing in the wisdom of your experience. Being a rookie at this stage in my life is exhilarating and with adding a twist on your motto: You are never too old to be what you were meant to be!
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Lyrics Competition Results
Emotional Impact:
19/ 20
Technical Skill:
18/ 20
Memorability:
17/ 20
Storytelling:
19/ 20
Imagery:
19/ 20
Total Score:
92/ 100
Commended
Comments:
Such a beautiful story with so much love and sadness.
I love that you used the water image all the way through and used it to describe different things. Ocean in a drop is a fantastic line. A really memorable song. Well done!
I love that you used the water image all the way through and used it to describe different things. Ocean in a drop is a fantastic line. A really memorable song. Well done!
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7/7/25 or as one interested in the quantum universe – 777; a remarkable date! Will this be the date the results are revealed?
Thank you for your kind review, I felt this to be my best as well. Do you know, or can you share the number of entries in this category?