2025 Competition Lyrics Entry:
The Here After by Ted Caldeira
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Lyrics
Black leather
Under neon lights
Should’a known
Should’a never
Come here tonight
Oh…oh…
Painted women
Cherry-red door
Gold wedding bands
Scattered like
Rocks on the floor
Oh…oh…
Chorus
And I linger
Now…
In the here after
(Repeat)
Verse
Mind crushin
On the days gone by
Maybe one or two
Will come back to life
Oh…
Repeat chorus
Bridge:
Cold blooded killin
Happened here
Tonight…
Man’s broken heart
Lay dryin
On the boulevard
Tonight…
Waitin on God’s hand
To maybe touch it
Make it beat again
Watchin and wonderin
If I’ll ever get to
Love again…
Love again…
Chorus repeat x 2
Under neon lights
Should’a known
Should’a never
Come here tonight
Oh…oh…
Painted women
Cherry-red door
Gold wedding bands
Scattered like
Rocks on the floor
Oh…oh…
Chorus
And I linger
Now…
In the here after
(Repeat)
Verse
Mind crushin
On the days gone by
Maybe one or two
Will come back to life
Oh…
Repeat chorus
Bridge:
Cold blooded killin
Happened here
Tonight…
Man’s broken heart
Lay dryin
On the boulevard
Tonight…
Waitin on God’s hand
To maybe touch it
Make it beat again
Watchin and wonderin
If I’ll ever get to
Love again…
Love again…
Chorus repeat x 2
Lyrics Competition Results
Emotional Impact:
8/ 20
Technical Skill:
9/ 20
Memorability:
8/ 20
Storytelling:
8/ 20
Imagery:
9/ 20
Total Score:
42/ 100
Comments:
I think we need more information in the song about who the narrator is and who they are singing to.
The colour imagery is nice in the second part.
The colour imagery is nice in the second part.
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Hi again. Ted here. Please elaborate on the R1 & 2 Unset quotation. Not sure exactly what that would mean for my entry. Does it mean my entry is being sorted in relation to it’s position within those rounds and that position will be revealed tomorrow?. Or, perhaps does it mean something else.
Once again, thank you for your time and attention.
Sincerely,
Ted
Hello and good morning.
Looks like I didn’t make it to the shortlist
If you can provide confirmation of this please do. If not, that’s okay.
Please have a wonderful day and thank you once again for your time and attention.
Sincerely,
Ted Caldeira
Hello again. Ted here.
Forgot to mention this is actually a full blown song with melody, harmony and orchestration providing a musical, prosodic underpinning to these words.
The rhythm of the lines are therefore very much tied to the music they are stitched to.
Thanks again for your time and attention.
Sincerely,
Ted Caldeira
Hello and thank you for your time and attention.
In relation to the giving clarity to the narrator perhaps a phrase like ‘ wore my black leather…’or ‘showed my black leather’ at the start of the opening stanza
would help.
Also, within the bridge perhaps ‘This man’s broken heart’ could also bring clarity.
In terms of who he is singing to perhaps a phrase like
‘Love another like you again’ or ‘a woman
like you again ‘ could add clarity.
Hope this helps and, if I come up with better examples, I’ll forward them to you.
Just reading this now.
Best regards and thank you for your time and attention.
Sincerely,
Ted Caldeira