2025 Competition Lyrics Entry:
Sun On The Horizon by Rick Poplawski
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Lyrics
The sun on the horizon
Begins to fade from view
And even after all these years
My thoughts, are still of you
We were only young then
But both of us still knew
There wouldn’t be another
It was only me and you
Even though I lost you
I smile at you each day
You’ve still been with me all my life
I’ll be with you soon to say
I loved you from the first time
I thought I saw you look
I held you deep inside my soul
One glimpse is all it took
Took the same journey
On the same train
Sat beside you on the way
We smiled and started talking
Both had so much more to say
We’d walk out of the station
Share a cab
To stay close by
Told stories of our past days
Sometimes we’d even cry
And then I took you
Out one night
We danced the hours away
Held you close and
Kissed you gently
Saw you each and every day
I loved you from the first time
I thought I saw you look
I held you deep inside my soul
One glimpse is all it took
Mmm
One glimpse is all it took
One morning I woke up late
Missed the train
By just a few
Tried to call
And send a message
But
Had no signal to get through
I walked out of our station
Flashing lights were all around
Crowds of people there had gathered
Your body, lying on the ground
You’d tried to reach my number
Last entry on your phone
You didn’t see the speeding car
And died there all alone
I loved you from the first time
I loved you from the first time
I thought I saw you look
I hold you deep inside my soul
My heart that day you took
My heart that day you took
Been waiting my whole lifetime
To be with my only love
I can feel it’s getting close now
Feel her pull from high above
The sun on the horizon
Begins to fade from view
I smile and start my journey
Once more to be with you
Once more to be with you
Once more just to be with you…….
Begins to fade from view
And even after all these years
My thoughts, are still of you
We were only young then
But both of us still knew
There wouldn’t be another
It was only me and you
Even though I lost you
I smile at you each day
You’ve still been with me all my life
I’ll be with you soon to say
I loved you from the first time
I thought I saw you look
I held you deep inside my soul
One glimpse is all it took
Took the same journey
On the same train
Sat beside you on the way
We smiled and started talking
Both had so much more to say
We’d walk out of the station
Share a cab
To stay close by
Told stories of our past days
Sometimes we’d even cry
And then I took you
Out one night
We danced the hours away
Held you close and
Kissed you gently
Saw you each and every day
I loved you from the first time
I thought I saw you look
I held you deep inside my soul
One glimpse is all it took
Mmm
One glimpse is all it took
One morning I woke up late
Missed the train
By just a few
Tried to call
And send a message
But
Had no signal to get through
I walked out of our station
Flashing lights were all around
Crowds of people there had gathered
Your body, lying on the ground
You’d tried to reach my number
Last entry on your phone
You didn’t see the speeding car
And died there all alone
I loved you from the first time
I loved you from the first time
I thought I saw you look
I hold you deep inside my soul
My heart that day you took
My heart that day you took
Been waiting my whole lifetime
To be with my only love
I can feel it’s getting close now
Feel her pull from high above
The sun on the horizon
Begins to fade from view
I smile and start my journey
Once more to be with you
Once more to be with you
Once more just to be with you…….
Author
Bio
Started writing Lyrics in Oct 2024..AI assistance has helped me to produce over 100 songs to date (Music/Vocals) and I intend to go on forever.
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Lyrics Competition Results
Emotional Impact:
17/ 20
Technical Skill:
15/ 20
Memorability:
12/ 20
Storytelling:
16/ 20
Imagery:
10/ 20
Total Score:
70/ 100
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Comments:
What a compelling and sad story. I had no idea it would end so sadly and when I read that verse it really surprised me.
Maybe play with the imagery more to really paint the picture of these characters and their train journey. What colour are the seats? Was it an old rickety train or a new smooth one?
Maybe play with the imagery more to really paint the picture of these characters and their train journey. What colour are the seats? Was it an old rickety train or a new smooth one?
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