2025 Competition Lyrics Entry:
Dimensions by Michael M White
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Lyrics
[Verse]
I flew between dimensions, sailed inside the skies
To soothe the sting of your tears, that swell inside these eyes
I tried to walk each mile beside you, to feel how deep you feel
But I’m falling, falling, falling, deep desires, couldn’t see
[Chrous]
I could have known you
You wanted me to see
I could have shown you
The man I was trying to be
[Chrous]
I could have known you
You bled; I couldn’t see
I could have shown you
The man I’m trying to be
[Verse]
I flew between dimensions
Landed softly ‘neath the pines
A cabin deep in winter, dreams of passions and mulled wine
I want to walk the miles beside you
to see the things you see
But the wilting season held you
never set you free
[Chorus]
I could have known you
You wanted me to see
I could have shown you
The man I was trying be
I could have known you
You bled, I couldn’t see
I could have shown you
The man I’m trying to be
[Chorus]
I could have known you
You wanted me to see
I could have shown you
The man I was trying be
I could have known you
You bled, I couldn’t see
(I could have shown you
The man I’m trying to be)
[Instrumental]
(oo oo oo oo oo oo, trying to be)
[Fade]
Written in 2015
I flew between dimensions, sailed inside the skies
To soothe the sting of your tears, that swell inside these eyes
I tried to walk each mile beside you, to feel how deep you feel
But I’m falling, falling, falling, deep desires, couldn’t see
[Chrous]
I could have known you
You wanted me to see
I could have shown you
The man I was trying to be
[Chrous]
I could have known you
You bled; I couldn’t see
I could have shown you
The man I’m trying to be
[Verse]
I flew between dimensions
Landed softly ‘neath the pines
A cabin deep in winter, dreams of passions and mulled wine
I want to walk the miles beside you
to see the things you see
But the wilting season held you
never set you free
[Chorus]
I could have known you
You wanted me to see
I could have shown you
The man I was trying be
I could have known you
You bled, I couldn’t see
I could have shown you
The man I’m trying to be
[Chorus]
I could have known you
You wanted me to see
I could have shown you
The man I was trying be
I could have known you
You bled, I couldn’t see
(I could have shown you
The man I’m trying to be)
[Instrumental]
(oo oo oo oo oo oo, trying to be)
[Fade]
Written in 2015
Author
Bio
My creative persona is named, Odnté. Old Dog New Tricks. and É, I’m Canadian.
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Lyrics Competition Results
Emotional Impact:
11/ 20
Technical Skill:
8/ 20
Memorability:
7/ 20
Storytelling:
10/ 20
Imagery:
10/ 20
Total Score:
46/ 100
Commended
Comments:
I liked the winter cabin verse, the imagery is really captivating.
I feel we need to know more about the characters. Why are you flying between dimensions? Why does this person mean so much to you?
I feel we need to know more about the characters. Why are you flying between dimensions? Why does this person mean so much to you?
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