2025 Competition Lyrics Entry:
Before the 2nd Glass of Wine by Ron Risden
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Lyrics
You walked into the bar
Your legs peeking out of your green skirt
A sly smile came to my face
I was hoping we’d would start to flirt
Our words began a dance
The start of 3 hours of fun
I ordered my beer
You had glass of wine number one
Emotions sprang up in me
That were buried for a long time
I found myself falling for you
Before your second glass of wine
You told me so casually that you were now free
And it made my lonely heart skip a beat
I learned over to kiss you
And almost fell off my seat
To describe your lips
I could only say divine
Now here I am still falling
Before your second glass of wine
Like a knife in my back
When we said goodbye
Because
I thought everything was fine
But I was just love blind
Because you made up your mind
You would never be mine
Before the second glass of wine
Before the second glass of wine
Your legs peeking out of your green skirt
A sly smile came to my face
I was hoping we’d would start to flirt
Our words began a dance
The start of 3 hours of fun
I ordered my beer
You had glass of wine number one
Emotions sprang up in me
That were buried for a long time
I found myself falling for you
Before your second glass of wine
You told me so casually that you were now free
And it made my lonely heart skip a beat
I learned over to kiss you
And almost fell off my seat
To describe your lips
I could only say divine
Now here I am still falling
Before your second glass of wine
Like a knife in my back
When we said goodbye
Because
I thought everything was fine
But I was just love blind
Because you made up your mind
You would never be mine
Before the second glass of wine
Before the second glass of wine
Lyrics Competition Results
Emotional Impact:
12/ 20
Technical Skill:
12/ 20
Memorability:
13/ 20
Storytelling:
12/ 20
Imagery:
10/ 20
Total Score:
59/ 100
Comments:
I loved the “second glass of wine” hook.
You told the story well but perhaps try showing not telling some parts of the story, so you can use more imagery to paint the picture rather than just telling the listener what happened.
You told the story well but perhaps try showing not telling some parts of the story, so you can use more imagery to paint the picture rather than just telling the listener what happened.
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