2025 Competition Lyrics Entry:
Heart Thief by Ron
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Lyrics
You use your hands to talk, they whisper
In your eyes a smile to comfort me
We shared a night so warm and tender
I was yours and you belonged to me
You laughed aloud as if you knew then
That I’d be coming back for more
You insisted “don’t you complicate this”
as you waved and sashayed out the door
The shadows held me closely, the morning called my bluff
You crept off like a heart thief leaving me less than enough
The room was dark like a lonely heart… yet I long for where we’ve been
Will I never come to you with a stranger’s love again?
Using my memories I hold you
I remember only what I want to
You promised that you’d see me later
If you don’t I promise I will haunt you
Were we intimate? Kinda, briefly
The shadows danced like ghosts
You crept off like a heart thief
Did I anticipate? Almost
Now I watch you go to someone else
you’ll blow away with your shy grin
Will I never come to you with a stranger’s love again?
In your eyes a smile to comfort me
We shared a night so warm and tender
I was yours and you belonged to me
You laughed aloud as if you knew then
That I’d be coming back for more
You insisted “don’t you complicate this”
as you waved and sashayed out the door
The shadows held me closely, the morning called my bluff
You crept off like a heart thief leaving me less than enough
The room was dark like a lonely heart… yet I long for where we’ve been
Will I never come to you with a stranger’s love again?
Using my memories I hold you
I remember only what I want to
You promised that you’d see me later
If you don’t I promise I will haunt you
Were we intimate? Kinda, briefly
The shadows danced like ghosts
You crept off like a heart thief
Did I anticipate? Almost
Now I watch you go to someone else
you’ll blow away with your shy grin
Will I never come to you with a stranger’s love again?
Lyrics Competition Results
Emotional Impact:
11/ 20
Technical Skill:
10/ 20
Memorability:
9/ 20
Storytelling:
9/ 20
Imagery:
10/ 20
Total Score:
49/ 100
Comments:
The idea is nice but to help paint the picture more we need to hear more imagery and less facts.
“The room was dark like a lonely heart” is a beautiful line, so write a little more like that and the song will be amazing.
Also, the term “heart thief” is nice and original but I don’t think it works for the title of the song as the line that lingers is “stranger’s love” so I’d probably call it that as that’s what listeners will probably call it when referring to the song.
“The room was dark like a lonely heart” is a beautiful line, so write a little more like that and the song will be amazing.
Also, the term “heart thief” is nice and original but I don’t think it works for the title of the song as the line that lingers is “stranger’s love” so I’d probably call it that as that’s what listeners will probably call it when referring to the song.
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