Timber And Stone
My first go at a monthly challenge! This is a song inspired by a painting of an old, sooty derelict building that I have entered in this year's Liverpool Acoustic Song Writing Competition, and secrets it could it reveal to the protagonist that once worked or lived or visited it?
So, you’re still here / in that long black coat / with pockets full of notes / left by ghosts / Could you tell me what they wrote?
Timber and stone / Now exhausted and gaunt / has provided a home / for the known and unknown
So, you stand alone / and you squint at the sun / now your compadres have gone. / Can you hang on and give me the answers I want
Timber and stone / Now exhausted and gaunt / has provided a home / for the known and unknown
Oh, that black coat / it’s showing its age / seams are all frayed / like tempers that day / when tears were blinked away
Did the best man lose? How did she choose? Did your clerks put it down in the ledger?
Timber and stone / Now exhausted and gaunt / has provided a home / for the known and unknown. / It's time to atone
Atmospheric
Like Simon says, this has a lot of atmosphere to it, particularly as your performance is understated and almost confessional. I like the way you get maximum bang for your buck with the imperfect lyric rhymes such as coat, notes and ghosts. You say this is you first monthly challenge – good luck, look forward to hearing your song next time. Cheers.
Thanks for the encouraging words!
Lovely feel to this song. A good listen.
Contemplative and mysterious. Very pleasant and gentle on the ears
Great to see you joining in the challenge fun Paul. Love the laid back feel to this tale.
Good storytelling, you capture a sad and pensive atmosphere.
Plenty of questions & secrets hidden in your song, Paul. Very enigmatic.
I enjoyed the little half glimpses of insight into past occupants. Welcome to the monthly challenge hope we’ll be hearing more from you.
I like the chord progression here Paul and the delivery cries to me of Pink Floyd. Looking forward to hearing more of your songs in future challenges
Thanks everyone for your encouraging comments, and especially if you were the one who voted for me!