The Long Return

Responses

1. 

   Philip Dodd 29 April, 2023

   The Long Return. I deleted my video by mistake, here it is, restored. My song is not about setting sail on the sea, but into space.

2. 

   Philip Dodd 29 April, 2023

   The Long Return
   All the lines are drawn, all the stones are raised.
   In the tones of dawn, all the gods are praised.
   All that we have known, all the things we made,
   all that we have shown, we shared in fair trade.

   Now we journey home on our long return.
   Now we journey home on our long return.

   All the signs are clear, all the lights are bright.
   Over stars we steer, attain lanes for flight.

   Farewell to your land, farewell to your shore,
   farewell to your sand, now forevermore.

   Now we journey home on our long return.
   Now we journey home on our long return.

   Thought it would be good, thought it could be fine.
   Things were as they should when the stars were mine.

   Farewell to this isle on the ocean bed.
   Let us wait awhile think of things we said.

   Now we journey home on our long return.
   Now we journey home on our long return.

3. 

   Suzanne Harper 30 April, 2023

   I’m glad I checked in again and found you’d reposted your song, Philip. Interesting lyrics and it feels like a chant. As you only use the same chords and same notes, I wondered if going higher at a few points in the song would have added variety. Maybe even add a few extra notes to maintain interest. An interesting approach to the theme.

4. 

   Philip Dodd 1 May, 2023

   Thank you very much for listening to my song, Suzanne. I am glad you thought my lyrics were interesting. Yes, you are right, more variety in my singing and guitar playing would have improved the recording of my song.