If love is a game of chance are you all in? A small sweet love song on taking chances. I've probably entered too late this month, the song was written a week or two ago but I got lost in gambling, horse, racing and casino metaphors.
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V1
The betting slip
Falls to the ground
The hoofbeats of my departing dreams
Still sounding all around
Did I miss
The starting gun?
Did I put the horse before the cart
Before the race was run?
Pre chorus
There are winners and some losers
When you’re looking
Looking for the one
Chorus
And although it seems like
The race of life is through
I backed a few non starters
And I’m still looking for you
I’m gonna to put a bet on you (hold)
Taking a chance on you
Take a chance on you
Chance is like a
Fickle god
Even if I shuffle
I’ll never beat the odds
And I’m holding just
The two of spades
Still hoping that the queen of hearts
Might turn up some day
The cards we’re dealt
Is all we’ve got to play
And when it seems like
the game of life is through
If you help me cash my chips in,
here’s what I’m going to do
I’m gonna take a chance on you (hold)
Taking a chance is what I’ll do
Take a chance on you
Take a chance on you
M8
And if the chips are down
Sometimes • you have to • be bold
We can play • we can burn
we can fold
The cards we’re dealt
Are the cards we hold
And although it seems like
The game of life is through
Lets take the cards and shuffle,
And see what we’re going to do
I’m gonna take a chance on you (hold)
Taking a chance, is what I’ll do
Take a chance on you
I’ll take a chance on you
My goodness Ian, you’ve got every betting analogy in the world in there! I really enjoyed the lyrics, and the way you built up the song throughout. Nice one! ?
Thanks, Heather! There were a few classic ones that I left out, “spin the wheel of chance” “put between the teeth” “didn’t leave the starting gate”…. I was pleased to leave in “two of spades”… I sometimes play a very weedy “ace of spades” at folk clubs, so that line was always staying in. At first the middle 8 was the chorus, but then I moved it all around… I’ve been taking advice from the workshops into consideration and let the song meld for a bit/play it live a couple of times before I record. Really helps. Ta for the kind words!
Thrown such a lot of betting phrases on there. I really like the hoofbeats of my departing dreams. A lovely gentle song. I agree with your comment about letting songs settle before recording. It’s a bit like wearing in your new shoes around the house before wearing them at an all day event – need to be sure it performs well and adjusted to properly fit before letting loose!
Absolutely! I was listening to a Elles Bailey song recently… “Barrel of a gun”, she uses a lot of well worn phrases to paint a compelling picture, I was hoping I’d be able to do as good a job. Not quite, but it was fun trying!
It’s a shame that this forum pushes people into rushing to put things up. It really does seem that if you get your song up really quickly, you get early bird votes.
I can’t rush mine either…and I don’t want to. I enjoy the writing and tweaking process and try to play mine live a couple of times too. I play this month’s entry with just guitar and the recording has the basic guitar track running all the way through. So Chris and I have had some fun performing it.
You’ve obviously put a lot of thought into thecstructure and lyrics and it shows. X
Thanks Heather… I agree with you, I never really get any votes on this platform, and I am usually finished 2-3 weeks into the challenge. I do OK on Facebook. Do I mind? Not really… I enjoy making the songs, whether or not the response is good. I do feel like I’m learning though… for me, it’s interesting to hear other peoples songs, so I count an entry as the price for being able to do this. Fun times!
As one of those who got a song out early this month, I agree the number of views is definitely higher – simply because it’s out longer. But the vote to view ratio really isn’t great so I guess it still needs to be a compelling enough song to convince people to vote and I think some hold back from casting their votes until the end of the month anyway. I usually do this, but have voted for some (but not all I intend to yet) a little earlier this month just because I’d finished mine so quickly. I tried my song out at an open mic following posting and did it at a very different speed which I think I preferred (although nerves had a lot to do with the pace ?) so you’re probably both right about waiting until it’s “finished”. I just wanted it done as it was taking up too much thinking & headspace, but lesson learned. The best thing about the process though for me is the interaction and comments. I really appreciate them so try to do that as much as I can because I welcome it so much and I know you are both very much “givers” in that respect. So thanks ?
Hey Rebecca, interesting thoughts! And thank you for posting… I must admit, on here, I never disagree with the highest posted songs, because they are really good… And it’s interesting to be forced into the video format.. just bought some cheap lights, and was looking at green screens… your video was epic! 🙂
…. And I did, one month, get an entry up on the day the challenge was announced… fun thing to do, and it did quite well.. it was a rubbish song, though 🙂
Hi Ian, as mentioned on the Facebook page this is a cracker – great lyrics and you obviously put a lot of thought into the other instruments. I’ll give this a vote Cheers, Phil
I think your song writing gets better and better. This is great Ian. The production is good too. Great job!
Thanks Julie, I think you’re right.. I’ve had a productive few months… all the bits and pieces I’ve picked up from the workshops, masterclasses, hospitals and importantly, listening to everyone else’s great songs has really helped. Since Christmas I’ve written quite a few songs that I actually like. Some are more electronic/electric, so never turn up here. All part of the journey. Thank you for the kind words!
Great lyrics Ian. You’ve really picked up on the chances theme through the use of all the gambling phrases. Tidy
Thanks, Huw. I’ve played this “out” a couple of times, and it works well live, so job done!
Huw, also I had to rework as the lyrics were way too close to your structure, which was great. Led me up an interesting path!